Friday, 11 January 2008

First Friday Snippet

This is a brief excerpt from somewhere near the beginning of my current WIP. I've only looked back over it once to check for grammar and spelling, so it will no doubt go through various forms before I'm happy with it. I don't think it really needs much introduction, so I'll just plunge in.

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Liulfra threw the carcass aside and trotted further on through the woods, ears alert and nostrils flared. Her hunger and bloodlust were sated for now; it was time to seek out a new companion. She paused and sat back on her haunches, wondering what direction would be best.

She had very little knowledge of this area; until now, she had never travelled more than a day's travel away from the camp. She had been moving in this direction for three nights, sleeping during the day, relishing the opportunity to indulge her wolfish side. She still felt it strange that in a place where shapeshifters were the only inhabitants it was considered rude to wear a non-human shape in public, and she loved the feeling of release from such constraints.

It was so strange to be free of them. She had known nothing else all her life, and she found it difficult not to keep referring back to the camp in her mind; her journey had taken her only through forest so far, and she had not yet met a single human. She had, however, come across a pack of wolves, who had viewed her suspiciously at first but nonetheless welcomed her fairly swiftly into their midst. They had allowed her to spend the previous day in their den with them, although she was asked to stay in the main cavern rather than enter their own sleeping quarters. Wolves, as she had discovered before, were rather keen on their customs and stood firmly on tradition; only family members were permitted to pass the main halls of their homes. There had been a younger wolf, just ready to find a mate, who had viewed her with interest. It had been rather difficult not to respond, but she knew that if she did they would expect her to stay, and if she then proceeded on she would find other packs less welcoming in future. So she had rebuffed his cautious advances; but ultimately it only served to heighten her need for another companion.

It was now late the next evening, and Liulfra was beginning to feel a need for her human form. Although she was capable of remaining a wolf for much longer - indefinitely really - she preferred not to; too long and she began to wish to stay that way, almost forgetting that it was not her true shape. She glanced up at the night sky. The moon was high above the trees - a slim silver crescent. It would be new moon in just a couple of days, and she hoped she would be able to make the change sooner rather than later; although she was capable of doing so at any time, it would drain her strength more to do so at new moon that at any other time. During the week of the full moon she would be at her strongest, but she did not want to wait that long.

Shaking her fur, she stood again and continued along the slightly worn route she had chosen to follow, assuming that the chances of coming across human habitation would be higher on a route that seemed not exclusively for the use of animals. She moved quickly and quietly, relying mainly on her senses of smell and hearing. She stopped suddenly, raised her head and listened intently.

Voices. Human voices.

She had to stop herself from giving a yelp of excitement; instead, she moved quickly but cautiously in the direction of the noise, her paws treading softly on the worn ground, barely making a sound. As she spotted the group ahead, she moved off the path and dropped to her belly, moving soundlessly behind the cover of the shrubs that shrouded it.

Liulfra was very much aware that she had never actually seen a group of normal humans, but even so she was fairly certain that this particular selection was far from ordinary. In fact, they weren't even all human; the group seemed to include a surprisingly small lilac-coloured dragon, only a little taller than she was herself in wolf form, and perhaps twice as long. It would still be a challenge to fight - she licked her lips at the thought - but nothing like she had imagined a dragon to be. And she'd read enough books to know that they were supposed to be a bit more formidable than this one was, purple or not.

There were two women with the dragon - one probably a little bit younger than Liulfra, one rather older, perhaps around thirty-five - who she dismissed immediately, although she was interested to note that one of them seemed to be riding a flying horse; but there was also a young man. Probably about thirty. Rather pretty; not usually to her taste at all, but perhaps he'd be worth it. There were small lanterns on the backs of the horses - she wasn't sure how they worked, but they certainly didn't look like flame. She shrugged off her curiosity, and began to focus her mind to begin the change, but instead found herself listening to the group's discussion.

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8 comments:

Anonymous said...

Interesting set-up. I like the bit about the impropriety of wearing your form despite no one being human, and how wolves are big on tradition. The devil's in the details.

That said, you tell an awful lot. I know you want to have a good frame of reference for the reader when the story starts, but trust the reader to figure it out.

(If you did go back and read my snippets, you'll see I have a penchant for the slow reveal of information in Tuesday's opening.)

I love the tiny lilac dragon, and I'm curious what a band of real humans - and their companions - are doing way out there. :)

Davina Pearson said...

Thank you for taking the time to take a look at this :)

I completely agree with what you've said and it's one of the reasons I'm looking forward to going back over things. The first 50K of this (NaNo, naturally) was so very much a don't-look-down draft that I literally threw in everything that came into my head as soon as it arrived. By now I've come to realise that a lot of it isn't relevant at all, and some of it is just contradictory to later parts, but at the time it seemed important ;)

I'm saving your snippets for the weekend, but I'm really looking forward to reading them :)

Renee M. Solberg said...

Hi Davina.

I posted my first snippet this Friday too :)

I really like the way you reveal the differences of the world for a shapeshifter and also how it illustrates Liulfra's way of negotiating in it. I also am very curious about the unusual group with companions she has come across and what they are all about. I thought the sentence about the groups lanterns seemed to hint that there were other differences to be revealed about this group perhaps not just confined to surface view.

I'm intrigued by what I've read so far and look forward to seeing more as you post.

Davina Pearson said...

Hi Ray, thanks so much for your comments :) There's definitely more to be revealed - I'm glad to see you're intrigued! I'm off to check yours out now!

Anonymous said...

You've started with the moment that something changed in the MC's world, and that's a great place to start.

Interesting set of characters. Though I'll admit that when Liulfra saw the thirty-five year old woman and dismissed her, I wanted to thump her on the head. :D

Davina Pearson said...

Thanks for taking the time to comment, Cheryl :) Wanting to hit Liulfra over the head is a fairly common feeling for me, but I'm getting used to it!

Anonymous said...

Hey, I wandered over from Tudor's Desk. The wolf thing is intriguing me... I like the lilac dragon. :-) I'll have to bookmark your page and come back to visit!

Davina Pearson said...

Thanks Jen, I'm flattered that you want to hear more :) Guess I'll have to try and remember to do the snippets again!